New Year Day is the best occasion for every people. Everywhere will have the party to celebrate for special day. Many people will prepare firework, foods, something to drink and the gift to celebrate New Year Day. I will tell you about my New Year Day in two days ago.
In the first day, I went home and went to do merit in the temple with my family. I met my family in another country. We was cooking many food together, singing, dancing and changing our gift. I was happy and fun. I believe my family think so.
The second day, I went to Arawan water fall with my friend and my boyfriend. We prepared the food and everything to picnic at there. We swam and took a lot of photos. While we enjoined about it, it was raining. After raining we went home.
However, my holiday so shot but I had a lot of activities and was happy in that day.
Your assay is interesting and your writing is OK. You should picture in this story because it is more interesting.
ReplyDeleteI can't see your picture or you haven't picture in your writing.
ReplyDeleteGood story but I have a question?
ReplyDeleteI met my family in another country. what do you mean?
This story is very interesting and you write is good.
ReplyDeleteIf you talked about the NY day in every year,I think you should use the simple tense,not future tense as the sentences Everywhere will...or Many people will... because it happen every year
ReplyDelete-While we were enjoying,it was raining. I think this sentence is more suitable.
and some little wrong grammar,pls check again.